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Law Personal Statement Example 85
I first became interested in the study of law when I came to the realization that without an understanding of law you are placed at a major disadvantage in all aspects of life, and make most life decisions on assumption alone.
This is not the way I wish to live my life and I can see that law must be known by all who have aspirations.
I have always been very curious ever since I could remember, always annoying my family with that famous question: Why?
First I need a notion to be proven before I can accept it as truth, which annoys me more than others, but during exams I can easily discuss a theory as truth without believing it myself.
As a child I was very argumentative, I understood that to win an argument changing paradigms was the way to victory and I would put my skills to the test anytime I could.
At A-Level I studied Biology, Chemistry and Physics; I took these subjects because they came naturally to me. But, as my a-level studies progressed I became more and more frustrated with the suppression of evidence that would suggest an accepted theory is wrong or incomplete.
The “Sciences” are only interested in the manipulation of phenomena and not the cause of their existence. So I decided a complete change was needed or I would be stuck feeling frustrated. I thoroughly enjoy learning the laws that define each of us, weather its natural laws, religious laws or social laws and the impact they have on our way of life.
My a-level studies gifted me the mental tools needed to organise my thoughts, analyse information and form my own conclusion tools which are extremely useful during a debate.
Through my Duke of Edinburgh gold award I gained some very valuable skills. Organising under 11 football matches bettered my group organisation skills and enthusiasm to keep the team motivated.
Teaching math to year 7 students in my free periods tested my commitment at times and required a high level of self-motivation, but in the end when a student gets the concept your trying to get across it gives you a sense of fulfilment.
I strongly believe a career in law would suit my character perfectly as I am, organised, logical and determined but above all I am able to look past my own biases and convictions and see things from another’s perspective.
A trait which I believe to be necessary to enjoy a career in law, when defence of a client is your adgenda.
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This personal statement was written by jimjones for application in 2010.
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i find it really hard to write about myself so any and all help would be greatly appreciated.
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anybody wanna give a little
Mon, 17/12/2012 - 12:10
anybody wanna give a little feedback?
Advance warning. This is
Wed, 20/02/2013 - 14:34
Advance warning. This is going to seem harsh.
Start again. Throw that rubbish out.
There are a myriad of spelling and punctuation errors. You oscillate between A-Levels and a-levels. for example - should be capitalised.
There are also many misconceptions in here.
"As a child I was very argumentative, I understood that to win an argument changing paradigms was the way to victory and I would put my skills to the test anytime I could."
Twaddle. You're not changing a paradigm. You are presenting factual evidence and arguments to convince someone that your viewpoint is correct.
" which annoys me more than others,"
Egotistical.
"more and more frustrated with the suppression of evidence that would suggest an accepted theory is wrong or incomplete"
Doesn't happen often. And in science, when it does, it gets found out and publicised. That's the point in science. It's peer reviewed and must be independently verifiable to go from theory to fact.
"The “Sciences” are only interested in the manipulation of phenomena and not the cause of their existence."
Did you actually attend any science classes? Science is the study of the physical world and how things are done. The root cause of all things is the grail of physics (does the Grand Unified Theory of Everything sound familiar?) The manipulation of the sciences is the playground of engineers not scientists. We have to understand how things work, or we wouldn't be able to manipulate them. For instance, gravity is a theory, we do not know how it works and we can not manipulate gravity. The electromagnetic forces are well understood and we can easily manipulate them - see modern electronics.
"...the laws that define each of us, weather its natural laws, religious laws or social laws..."
weather? try whether. Also, the laws you mentioned do not define us. We adhere to them or not and they influence our behaviour.
"Teaching math to year 7 students "
Are you American? I assume not since you're (you also got that wrong in your app) doing/have done A-Levels. We call it maths in this country (UK - also if you are UK, you've got several American spelling in there).
"First I need a notion to be proven before I can accept it as truth"
Not capable of taking a theory apart and analysing from first principles to see if you come to the same conclusion then?
" I believe to be necessary to enjoy a career in law, when defence of a client is your adgenda"
*agenda
Only considering defence then? What about prosecution? Or contract law? Will execution? Conveyancing? General Legal advice?
"and make most life decisions on assumption alone. "
Yup. Everyone does. Its called life. You don't know everything about everything. You get in a car, you make assumptions about it's road worthiness and mechanical capacity. Similar for a plane, for a boat. You go into hospital, you assume the doctor knows what they're doing. Maybe you should study automotive, aeronautical and nautical engineering, as well as medicine. That way you won't have to make those assumptions. But you still won't be an expert in finance, economics or biochemistry...
"As a child I was very argumentative,"
But not any more?
I was harsh in my previous
Wed, 20/02/2013 - 17:22
I was harsh in my previous post. Here's some constructive ideas to help.
Rule #1: Don't denigrate other subjects. It's a bad idea, you don't know the background of the person reading your statement and it makes you look intolerant, unprofessional and somewhat arrogant. Do that in the pub, not an official application statement.
2. Talk about why you like debating/discussion and give relevant examples of your experience. Joined a debating society at school? Argued for anything (pub debates don't count) ?
3. Few schools offer law as a course, so the sciences are a good choice - they require brain power and the ability to reason. Highlight this. Why did you want to do sciences? Challenge? Mental stimulation? Curiosity?
4. Do some research on Law. What are the challenges? What does a barrister/solicitor (know the difference) do day to day? Highlight this knowledge.
5. What are your character traits and how would these be beneficial in this career path? Determination? Ability to focus under pressure? How do you react to pressure?
Keep in mind whoever reads this statement will have hundreds to read. If you don't make yours stand out for the right reasons, it'll get sh*t-canned. I read that in a five minute break at work, which is the kind of window it'll get. The errors and tone just screamed out "bad". First impressions count!!!!
The first impression that gave me was to wind me up enough to post that response when I got home - and I was passed the link as a source of amusement.
Be positive, but don't be trite. Everyone is organised, passionate and thinks they're well suited to the job.
Why are you well suited? What attracts you to the career? (Don't say want to help people - that's a facepalm comment)
Also, spell-check, get several people (preferably professionals) to read it and point out flaws.
Post up another effort here. I'll check back a couple of times over the coming week.
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